4:41, just a line tweak suggestion, the original having the double "better" feels repetitive, how about "Better finish them off properly next time..." 5:09, maybe needs a comma, "Oh, thanks sooo much." 16:56, Ryuuga is missing a "u" "Ryuga knows nothing about them." 17:42, looks like it might be missing the word "years" right now it's "Now, 500 since the dragon's birth..." I'm assuming it was meant to be "Now, 500 years since the dragon's birth..." 18:50, the double "though" feels kinda repetitive and awkward, maybe just drop the second "though" making it "It's not as though we live here..." or maybe a line change, like "Well, it's not like we actually live here." It's not like we live here though...